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  1. Hey Savannah! I love your modern approach to the initial story! I'm obsessed with Love and the City, and I think it was clever to put the story in this context. I feel like there are some similarities between the initial story and the tv-show. Besides, the fact that you've created your own illustration is ingenious; it definitely put images on the story and helps us imagine it. How do the guys know about the airline company? I understood that they were hatching a plan to leave the city, but it would be interesting to know which knew guy about it and why. What if you develop the men's perspectives and add more info on them? Like for example, what's their relationship between them? Did they know each other before? It could be interesting to have these details! Additionally, adding more dialogue between them could also dynamize the story and give more tension to the escape.
    Thank you for the story, I had fun reading it!

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  2. Hi Savannah!
    I really like the style and design of your storybook so far! I also love the theme of your first story! I like the you based it off of Sex and the City and made it more modern and fun to read. I was definitely more interested in the story because of how you wrote it. I am really interested to see if your future stories will all follow this same theme, because I think it could be really cute and interesting if all of your stories took more modern approaches to these stories. The only suggestion that I could give is that I think the story could use a bit more dialogue, but overall this is really good! Good luck!

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  3. Hey Savannah. It's so weird (in a good way) to see a page with the navigation on the left-hand side, it really helps your page stand out! "Nervous to nibble on their nuptials" may be my favorite turn of phrase I've read this entire week. The whole story was delightful to read, and the idea of "Flying Horse airlines" really made me chuckle.

    It might be worthwhile to add some content to your home page, maybe snippets or pictures from your introduction post? As for the story itself, about the only thing I can think of is perhaps expanding on the personalities of the "girls" a little bit, maybe through some dialogue. I'm thinking of a few scenes where trolls are arguing over how best to cook their meal, if that sparks any ideas for you. Either way, great work!

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  4. Hi Savannah! First and foremost, I really love the style and design of your storybook. It really grabbed my attention and I love the color choices. I love how you went with a modern approach to the story! It’s definitely more relatable and can be understood easier. I absolutely loved how you had illustrations which can really help us imagine and I personally think it makes your storybook unique. I think you did a great job on your story and I am interested to see if you are going to continue the theme on your future story or end up going a different route. The layout of your page was great, the only thing I would say would be the first page felt a little empty so adding a little something such as more images will definitely help. Overall great work!!

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  5. Hey Savannah!
    I really enjoyed reading your "Sex and the Goblin City" story! I have never actually watched "Sex and the City" but your story made me want to! I really enjoyed the modern twist that came to the story, especially the Flying Horse Airlines! One thing that I wondered was why the men were in the city with only women to begin with. Knowing that they were business men helped a little but I was still a little confused. When you stated "They all had horrible luck keeping a man around due to their extremely large appetite" you also could have added in a little more information about what they do to the men who they can't keep around. This better tie in the storage locker that you mention at the end of the story! Overall amazing story and I look forward to reading all your stories this semester!

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  6. Hi Sav! I like that your storybook is a collection of a few of your favorites stories you enjoyed this semester! It is great to see the twist that you will add to each of your favorite’s stories! Give a new perspective for sure! First off, I really enjoyed the format of your first story. The blocks give it dimension and helps to give breaks to different parts of the story! I liked the way you retold the story by adding pop culture reference. It allows for the story to be more relatable! I also really enjoyed reading you second story! Such a different and creative way of retelling Draupadi’s story! I also really love that you sister inspired you to follow this route. I enjoyed both of your stories and am excited to read more! A very modern like and fresh approach to the originals! A very well done job!

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  7. Hi Savannah!
    I love the layout of your website. It is so comforting and easy to navigate which is always good. The first thing that really caught my eye was your story of the sex and the goblin city. I am a huge Sex and the City fan and really find myself relating with some of the characters such as samantha hahaha. Anyways I am super excited to see what you have in store and keep up the good work!

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  8. Hello Savannah, I love your portfolio! Both stories were interesting and had a unique voice to them while still being recognizable as the original Indian myths. My favorite was your retelling of Draupadi and her five husbands. You really captured the feeling of innocent affection and friendship that makes up all elementary school crushes. I especially loved the girl power between Angela, Danielle, and all the other girls; they really put Andrew in his place for being a player. I love that you paired all of the stories with your own illustrations, it brings a tailor-made feeling to the entire project. I do not have any revision suggestions; I think both stories are well-written and captivating just as they are. I’m very excited to see what other stories and illustrations you add to your portfolio. You have such a strong start with these two and it is going to only get better the more you add to it!

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  9. Hi Savannah!
    I love that Judith is a blues singer, what an interesting profession for a main character. I also relate to Judith too I definitely was not made to stay home and cook a man dinner either, lol. I think it could be fun to add some descriptors of what the blues club was actually like on the inside, they are usually so vibrant, and I think it would be a great addition to your story. I enjoy the mystery of the stranger that gave her a ride. Once a friend and I were in a tight spot and got in the car with a stranger and unlike Judy we were lucky to have nothing bad happen to us. Being kidnapped is a personal fear of mine so the scene you portrayed provoked real fear. I’m glad Judy got out of the situation alright. I think you did a wonderful job modernizing the original story I can tell you put a lot of thought into your plot, and I can see all the original points of the story.

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  10. Hi Savannah, I really enjoyed reading your storybook. Your second story, “The Heart Wants What the Heart Wants” was so enjoyable to read because of the relatability. All the quotes of the characters were things I’ve heard during recess with my group of friends! I also was so happy to see you incorporate a picture you created on Canva – it brings the storybook so much personality! I like that you thought of your sister while writing this story – makes it more personable and unique! In regard to your third story, I was excited to read it because I watched Nina Paley’s Sita Sings the Blues video. I liked how you created the plot of the story to the modern day – made it more relatable. Once again, I liked how you incorporated a picture you made on Canva. Overall, I really enjoyed reading your storybook, it was so fun loving and lighthearted!

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